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Have you ever noticed that things can change, quickly, before you are ready for the results of those changes? Today I am thinking about time, adjustments, and poetry.
Here is a bundle to share:
The Next Day
You told me to love today,
And now today is past and
Tomorrow falls at my feet like a wet dog -
Ready to shake itself dry
But only at the expense of those who still stand nearby.
You are no longer here,
Like a shadow that breaks away,
With you doing the breaking
And me standing with stale bread -
Wondering when the wishbone shows up for the meal.
It’s tomorrow, you know,
(Do you know?)
And my mind lays in the past
Without the comfort of a pillow
Or blanket,
Without your musky scent in the air of my bedroom.
Take me back to the day you decided that
I would not be your tomorrow,
And warn me of the changes to come -
I promise I will clean up after myself
If only I know which moment you will step
And that your step will be without me.
©2013 Christy Birmingham
Do you know what will be your tomorrow?
This is christyb playing around with concepts of time.
This is nice Christy
Thank-you Crystol!!
Beautiful…I love the image of the wet dog…I can really relate to that!
Hehe Jane, oh those wet dogs!
Excellent writing! Especially love the line: “Tomorrow falls at my feet like a wet dog – Ready to shake itself dry” also “And me standing with stale bread – Wondering when the wishbone shows up for the meal.”…………… very expressive!
Roxi, as another poet I really appreciate your compliment here! Thank-you
Excellent and reminds me of some failed past relationships I had and how I felt after them. Really beautiful and I too loved the wet dog line
The wet dog line is certainly becoming a fave here! Hehe. Thanks Janine xx
Brought tears to my eyes, especially “Take me back to the day you decided that
I would not be your tomorrow…” Beautiful and heartbreaking.
Tricia, I am sorry to make you cry but it tells me that my words make the message I intended… Thanks for the share and wonderful comment here too.
Oh dear, a little sad, but so well-written. Wonderful work, Christy.
Hi Michelle, thanks for the nice comment and compliment. Wonderful to see you.
Beautiful poem and loved the metaphor of the wet dog…
Hi flemily, thanks for stopping by. I do like the line about the dog as well…
A poignant, sensitive poem, Christyb…beautiful sadness, it speaks to me of the past. So well done, my friend. “:) ~ R
You are right Raymond, there is a sadness here. I do wish you well, happy Monday xx
Hi Christy… touching, endearing, thoughtful and yes important… love this
Special hugs fro over the big rocks
Rolly, I appreciate all of your support. Special hugs xx
beautiful indeed, Christy!
I wish I knew my tomorrow…lol
however, I try to be pleasant to make my tomorrow bright…cheers!
Great attitude you have here Ruchira. Blessings!
Even if I did know what tomorrow would bring, I doubt I would change the depth with which I do anything, including love. Very excellent imagery in this one, Christy <3 xxx
Hi Red, wonderful to see you here! I am honored by the great comments here, such as yours xx
Christy–each one of these stanzas has a “gem” in them. From the wet dog of tomorrow shaking itself dry at your feet (at your friends; expense) to the breaking (of stale bread) switching out the who (and thing!) that breaks, to the stale unscented air, to the embodiment of the tomorrow you won’t be. Wow. Any one of these 4 sentiments (and expressions) is enough to carry the poem, and here you have 4. One of your best yet!
I had to read your comment a few times, Karen. I love the way you break it down and it really makes me feel so good about this poem. Thank-you xx
This is nice Christy!Thank you for this gift!
I like that you call the post a gift. Hugs!
I greet and wish you a successful new week!
Thanks Marko and wishing you a wonderful week as well!
Awesomely awesome – as are all your poems. You’ve got such a way with words!
Thanks Cyndi! You know, it’s comments like yours that keep me going!
You are using such great imagery I love this one Christy.
Thanks Val. I have had such wonderful responses to this poem. Hugs xx
I so love your poetry Christy and Things certainly change very quickly especially when like me you are in catch up mode!
Awe, well thanks for playing catch up here, Sue, I really appreciate all of your kind comments
i can relate to some failed love affairs and how i felt after, breaking up to me is so hard to do
you have so much talent
Thank-you for your compliment! I agree that love can be difficult sometimes but when it works out the rewards can be so wonderful. Take care
you have a amazing way with words great write
Thank-you so much for your support!
I like poetry, and I like this site! I am looking forward to reading more of your work!
Thanks Lorraine, and great to have you here!
Quite a sad undertone but at the same time very beautiful! Love the ‘wet dog’ analogy … so life!
Wet dogs, can’t you just see it now?! Thanks!