Calm Sea within a poem

Poem: How it would feel

How it would feel

I look across the calm sea and wonder where you are,
Hopeful that your face’s reflection will show up soon to
Validate the thoughts I have of you.
Do you really exist?

The splash of an oar on the shimmering liquid brings
Me back to the shoreline, where I run my fingers across
Ribs on shells, while wondering how it would feel to
Touch your thin cheek again.
Did I really see you that day?

Your cologne hangs in the air, close to my open mouth that
Carries no sound yet welcomes you always.
If you are thinking of me too, won’t you join me soon?
 
 
Β©2015 Christy Birmingham
 
 
~Note: The countdown is on. My new book will be out in about a month!

The photo of the calm sea was taken by me here in Victoria, BC. I hope your day is calm and lovely, with hints of poeticΒ reflections.

xo
Christy

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174 thoughts on “Poem: How it would feel

      1. SASS-A-FR-ASS

        I have always wanted to live over there. Been there a few time’s and while the mountains are beautiful Victoria is just…heaven! πŸ™‚

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        1. SASS-A-FR-ASS

          Will do! πŸ™‚ And should you find yourself on the border just holler! πŸ™‚
          Thank you.. I was editing some photos for a different project and my hair turned black. Which it’s been dyed black when I was younger but I think I may just dye it again! πŸ˜€

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  1. Stephen Thom

    the deep level of feeling – sadness, longing and hope – blends with, and mirrors, the great expanse of water, ‘where I run my fingers across/Ribs on shells’…great work πŸ™‚ How did you start writing poetry? Was it a natural, expressive moment, or did you study/read about metre/rhythm etc beforehand? The form intrigues me. All the best with the new book. πŸ™‚

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    1. Christy Birmingham Post author

      The shells metaphor is one of the parts I like best about the poem too, Stephen. Thank you for your thoughts on it. I am humbled. For me, writing poetry was something I pursued growing up but then it went dormant for several years. I then picked up the pen again as a form of therapy and found the poetic form to be the best way to work through my thoughts. When readers liked what I wrote, I was at first surprised and then intrigued. I value every comment. Thank you for your support πŸ™‚

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  2. Aquileana

    What a beautifully penned poem, dear Chris… Great for National Poetry Month ⭐
    The progression reality- fiction and the way they are intertwined is remarkably well done…
    Plus I love the last verse so much …Β¨If you are thinking of me too, won’t you join me soon?Β¨… I truly believe that when two person think about each other they are already together somehow… Even more if those thoughts are simultaneous… Hugs and happy friday to you!!!! Aquileana πŸ˜€

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    1. Christy Birmingham Post author

      Thank you, sweetie-Aqui-pie! Yes, they can be looking at the same stars in the sky and be aligned so well. I value you / your comments / your views so much! HUGS and loved your comment here. Absolutely, happy Friday! πŸ™‚ xo

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  3. megdekorne

    Dear beautiful one ….” Do you really exist …did I really see you that day …won’t you join me soon ” ….so very evocative and tender , a simply gorgeous poem of longing ….thank you Christy ! I just finished a poem today too and my last line is ” her mouth open ” ….so synchronized! …still searching for photographs ….yours are wondrous ! Hugs xxxmeg

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  4. Veronica

    Β‘Bien dicho! Me pongo de pie y te aplaudo Christy. El desarrollo que lleva a ‘ese’ final es delicioso. Besos y mis deseos de un excelente fin de semana. πŸ™‚

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  5. Debbie

    Gorgeous photo, lovely poem, Christy! Best wishes for much success with your book (how are able to stand the wait??). Hugs for a splendid and peaceful weekend!

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      1. Resa

        So glad you understood my comment!
        I wrote it when exhausted after a film day’s work. (& it’s getting harder & longer)
        No wonder I adore you!

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  6. Dave Small

    I especially like the first line: “I look across the calm sea and wonder where you are”. When the seas are rough we have to attention to the waves. When the seas are “calm” we get to reflect and pay attention to more meaningful things. And then we end up with beautiful poems like yours. Thanks for your excellent writing Christy.

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  7. lenie5860

    Hi Christy, congratulations on your new book – am looking forward to the cover reveal. Enjoyed this poem – brought back a pleasant memory.

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  9. irinadim

    Fabulous, delicate poem, Christy. The longing, felt through sight, touch and smell is so skilfully and beautifully woven into your lines. Great news about your new book, too. :)

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  10. Ste J

    I love this, absolutely beautiful, the splash of the oar brought me back from plenty of memories of being in such a situation. I think a new term should be created in your honour for this poem and I name it…parfact!

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  11. Heartafire

    “my open mouth that carries no sound” stunning, what a fine poet you are! Congrats on the upcoming book. ❀

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  12. Fiestaestrella

    Wow. I read this poem as expressing simultaneous longing and contentment, savoring even. The last line of the poem is a question turned outward – in contrast to the inward questions; does the last question stir the pool, and reveal the truth of an earlier vision/experience/scent. Is it real? Lovely writing, Christy. Congratulations on your newest book! I hope I can learn from you about how to publish poetry books. I know I am inspired by your writing and its quality.

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  13. rollyachabotbooks

    Hi Christy… a great poem of peace and yet the possibility of such joy. I love the way you have brought nature and the imagery of the sea into your words. Well penned my friend and sometimes the wait is well with the joy it can bring…

    Hugs as always

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  14. Sherri

    Thank you dear Christy for your calm sea and beautiful poem…I needed this today, bless you and I hope you have a calm, peaceful and joy-filled weekend πŸ™‚ ❀

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  15. Mahesh Nair

    Nice. You took me there.

    The longing for that special someone is really intense. Wonder, thinking of abstract reciprocation, someone who doesn’t know the special you might ask the same questions “do you really exist?” / “did he really see you that day?” and as a last plea “would you join him soon?”

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    1. Christy Birmingham Post author

      Hello Mahesh, so nice to hear from you! Yes, the abstract questions were perhaps calling for a voice to return with an answer… that means a lot to me that you found the words to be realistic. I hope you are doing well!

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  16. sheldonk2014

    Thank you for visiting,I thought I was following you but…… now I am,I wish you much success with your book. My wife has self published her book it’s on Amazon,e book to,if you like I can tell you more,she has a blog to
    As always Sheldon

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  17. Letizia

    I’m catching up on reading my favorite blogs after having been away for a while and it’s so nice to read one of your poems again. I like the quiet longing in this one, very delicate.

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  18. DG MARYOGA

    I am so sorry Christy Dear that I arrived so late to read your emotive poem under the reflective painterly scene you have captured.My holidays always leave me behind and then I start playing catch up.It’s now in my life,can’t live without it … lol
    I am so glad to hear that your new book is on the way and soon it will get what it deserves!
    I always trust your work!Wishing you every possible success!Sending Hugs of Love to you πŸ™‚ ❀

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    1. Christy Birmingham Post author

      Doda, hello sweet friend! Welcome back from your holidays and I hope you had a lovely time ❀ It's very nice of you to visit here and not to worry about coming later as I adore your comments! You are always welcome for tea and poetry πŸ™‚ ❀ Hugs!

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      1. DG MARYOGA

        Thank you so much for your understanding and the invite!How nice it sounds!”Tea & Poetry” … I can imagine ourselves having a cup of tea together and talk about poetry and your quality work!Hugs of love to you πŸ™‚ ❀ xxx

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  19. JL0073

    This was a lovely poem and I like the 2 questions you posed in the last two stanzas. It gives the poem an existential feeling. Both the speaker and the subject may not be in the same physical space but despite that the shared thoughts and feelings bring them together. It speaks to the power of love and how 2 people need not occupy the same space to be in synch with each other. Good job.

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    1. Christy Birmingham Post author

      Yes, indeed, in the spiritual realm we can meet, even when physically we are apart. Thank you, my friend, for appreciating the poem. Speaking of the ‘calm’ of the poem, I’ve just experienced the calmness after the storm of publishing. My second book is now out; I know you wanted me to alert you and so here I have. I hope you are doing well!!

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