Artistic Circles with Darkness Behind Them

Poem: The Next Take

The Next Take

You sat there in the dark, collecting dust
For days upon days
As you laid on a bed of pens and
Scissors with a bent handle.

I let you out
For a short visit here and there,
Undoing your jacket of dust
With a flutter, and a frown on my part.

Tick, tick, said the messenger, and then
Tick again, until my
Inked wing found a stable place for you.

It was then you received a tighter vest, and
A few more buttons before
You took to the sky while I watched
From where I crouched on the muddy ground.
May your next take be amazing.

 

©2017 Christy Birmingham

What Inspired the Poem?

The inspiration for this poem comes from a blog post I read about the backstory of the novel Course of Mirrors, including how the manuscript took several years to complete. My mind started to think of my own manuscript and the idea of half-written pages sitting in a drawer collecting dust.

Then, I read Teagan Geneviene’s A Bucket-full of Leftovers post about her wanting to complete her novels and release them. Wow, I thought, I really want to finish my book! Teagan’s motivation is amazing. I encourage you to read both of those blog entries.

Aha, now you know how this poem “The Next Take” came to be, as I visualized the unfinished manuscript for my third book in a human-like form. The words are alive in my head now, and I plan to pay attention to them.

Did you know that “The Next Take” poem was about a physical manuscript? Are you working on a writing project right now? If so, what is it about?

~Christy

Advertisements

136 thoughts on “Poem: The Next Take

  1. courseofmirrors

    Thank you for mentioning the backstory post from my site. I’m cheered that you felt inspired, not just to write this lovely poem … may the feathers of your story arrange themselves for flight and escape the drawer for their sky journey.

    Liked by 2 people

    Reply
  2. Teagan Geneviene

    Dear Christy, thank you for your words — the beautiful poem and the commentary afterward.
    I admit that I’ve been struggling this year. An ongoing (lack of) respect issue at my job has taken its toll after years of dealing with it. The chance to motivate others (at work) is one of the things I miss most (in all the many things I don’t get to do any more). So hearing that I provided you any motivation at all (let alone inspiration!) gives me such happiness! Thank you from my heart. Mega hugs.

    Liked by 2 people

    Reply
  3. Sue Dreamwalker

    Wonderful Christy.. and Teagan is a great motivator, I love her stories.. And your poem cleverly speaks of addressing the unfinished.. 🙂
    And yes.. I have been toying with the idea of starting to put my poems into a book form.. Toying … being the word.. As I have thought about it for years..
    Yet would not know really how to get something going..
    But I may well print some off and put them into a manuscript for the future to pass onto my Granddaughter as she grows.. I know i will when the time is right to do so… and who knows a book may well appear.. ❤
    And I am way behind in catch ups so much catch up with that post from Teagan.. xxxx ❤

    Liked by 2 people

    Reply
  4. prince2000ful Poems Videos and Photos.

    Christy Darling I thank you for the words written as a poem after some inspiration from a manuscript. I myself as you know is writing so much need only a a small sigh like a word , a sentence to fill my mind with ideas and then the words are just running.. I am so thankful for your nice visits on my blog and can only tell you that I am sorry for not getting all that time I want for also be able to read a lot more. I am still working during the days and writing and composing during the late ours or nights. ( Or when iI can steel some moments from my daily duties,) Sending all my love to you , With kind greetings . Kerstin

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
  5. Robert Matthew Goldstein

    The poem beautifully describes the editing process. I love the idea of letting a difficult piece ‘out’ for short visits.

    Right now the project I’m working on is an interview that I did with poet, Harold Norse in 1993.
    It’s about an hour long and I am dividing it into four parts.

    I’ve nominated you for the 5 day music challenge. As with all nominations from me there is no obligation to accept.

    http://wp.me/p47Ymh-5Yo

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
    1. Christy B Post author

      Thank you Robert for the award and, as you likely know, I’m an award-free blog BUT I appreciate the honor so much! Great to hear about your interview and I’m wishing you the best with it and the 4 parts – will it publish on your site?

      Liked by 1 person

      Reply
  6. aFrankAngle

    I didn’t make the connection to an unfinished manuscript as I thought it as an unfinished book (from reading, not writing). Oh well … well done, Christy … and good luck finishing your project.

    Oh yes … I have a writing project to finish … Although it won’t be published (yes, there is a very good reason), I still want to finish.

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
    1. Christy B Post author

      You were so close with your hunch about it relating to a book in some way, Frank! Thanks for playing along with guessing the poem’s subject matter 🙂 You’re such a tease with telling me about your purposely unpublished writing project. But, as you are a good friend, I’ll allow it!

      Liked by 1 person

      Reply
  7. C.E.Robinson

    Wonderful poem, Christy. I thought something unfunished and looked at on an off, then let go to gather something more. A poem, a manuscript. Always can see with new eyes. Still working on Sunset Inn book, the Story Structure to make sure I’ve included all the necessary specifics of the plot! Time consuming and important! Happy Wednesday! 🎶💛 Christine

    Like

    Reply
    1. Christy B Post author

      How nice to see you, Christine! It’s great to hear your writing project is continuing and your comment reminds me that we have to be patient as writing a book is a big project. Hugs

      Liked by 1 person

      Reply
  8. Alessandro Tinchini

    This is the second poem of yours I read and the second I like, Christy. You succeed where other poets always failed to my eyes and emotional receptors; you write about ordinary things with extraordinary language. This way, you create magic and keep it alive. It’s really no easy task, I think I’m not a poet mostly for that reason.
    Thanks for posting this.

    Liked by 2 people

    Reply
  9. Carolee Croft

    It’s an interesting subject, especially for all of us ink-stained wretches. Which manuscripts should be revived? Which should be abandoned? I have some story ideas from about seventeen years ago that I still think will one day make a good novel, though I’m not sure how to proceed with them. Right now, though, I’m working on a cute shifter romance story as well as a fantasy romance novel. Thanks for asking, and good luck with your book, Christy!

    Liked by 2 people

    Reply
    1. Christy B Post author

      Thanks for the support and sharing your own projects, C. Wow, you are working on 2 manuscripts at once?! You rock! I wish you all the best with them 🙂 ❤

      Like

      Reply
        1. Christy B Post author

          Awesome. Maybe you could write a blog post about it? It just seems so cool to me that you can do that! I can read more than one book at a time but not write more than one manuscript 🙂

          Liked by 1 person

        2. Carolee Croft

          One of the projects is so long (a trilogy) that it seems inevitable that I should start something new. I never thought about writing about it, but I might write about it when the story comes out.

          Liked by 1 person

    2. Alessandro Tinchini

      Hi, Carolee, the questions you pointed out are quite pivotal; which manuscript should be revived and which one abandoned. Most of the times we are unable to give an answer to those. I do have two drafts of the same story, each a different take on the same concept. Both unfinished. Sometimes I take them out, write some chapters in a rush of inspiration and put them aside again, discovering I didn’t keep my promise; finishing them. But I know I will succeed, that’s part of the story, part of our mission. And we love it. Now I’m organizing some notebooks to write my first memoir, a totally different kind of writing. Somehow I’m going to get stuck, at some point, who knows? And then I’ll go back to my unfinished drafts and add some words, until I get stuck again and go back to the memoir. But that’s okay, because I know that sooner or later I’m going to get there and finish what has to be finished. Good writing!

      Liked by 2 people

      Reply
      1. Carolee Croft

        Thanks for your comment, Alessandro. I totally agree, whatever was meant to be finished will be finished. I like your positive attitude. There are many writers out there who complain about how writing is such a painful process, but I wonder why they do it in the first place. I do love picking up those old manuscripts and working on them again. Good luck with your stories!

        Liked by 2 people

        Reply
      2. Christy B Post author

        Allessandro, your words to Carolee speak to the love of the writer for words and the struggle to meet what we set out to do, to overcome obstacles, and the acknowledgement that it won’t be an easy journey.. great share here and insight into your own writing process! Wishing you the best xx

        Liked by 2 people

        Reply
        1. Alessandro Tinchini

          It is a pleasure to share my own experience with people able to understand it and feel it. We are lonesome travellers most of the time of our lives, so I think meeting up and talk (or just write) to each other, can help us getting along better.
          Thank you for your best wishes, the same to you!
          Alessandro.

          Liked by 1 person

  10. dgkaye

    I loved this Christy. No! I didn’t guess it was about a manuscript. So cleverly disguised in beautiful prose. Sadly, I haven’t worked on my next book for months. Life has been in the way and vacation was badly needed and enjoyed. I know what I’ll be doing all summer, lol. ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
  11. Amy Caudill

    Christy,
    I got the metaphor immediately, because I understand the feeling. I’m getting ready to release a book I’ve been working on off and on for years. Throughout the journey I’ve struggled so many times with doubts and setbacks, that I never thought I would actually see my manuscript “fly.” Thanks for the inspiration to keep at it.

    Liked by 3 people

    Reply
  12. Resa

    I thought is was about a writer and their writing. It could have been a manuscript, a script, a diary or any writing project.
    “As you laid on a bed of pens” Isolating those words, I had a momentary chuckle,. I visualized a writer laying on their pens. Now that’s writers block.
    I like the metaphor with the vest a lot! Have a great weekend, Christy! xoxo

    Like

    Reply
    1. Christy B Post author

      Hahaha what you wrote about the writer on the bed of pens 😉 It could be a unique way to gain inspiration?! So nice to have your appreciation for poetry, Resa, whether it is my poems or someone else’s.. Let’s keep the poetic voices alive xxoo Enjoy your weekend too, hun

      Like

      Reply
  13. Andrea Stephenson

    A great ‘take’ on the subject of those waiting manuscripts Christy! I have one in my drawer that has been submitted to agents but not taken on, another that is currently out to submission. While I wait, I’m going back to the dusty one to rework it!

    Like

    Reply
  14. theburningheart

    Certainly your poem it’s very timely, always working on unfinished stuff…life seems nothing but working on stuff we have on hold! 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
  15. cav12

    These two lines really resonated with me. Maybe it’s because how I am feeling at the moment.
    ‘Undoing your jacket of dust
    With a flutter, and a frown on my part.’
    Amazing poem, Christy 😀

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
  16. Annika Perry

    Christy, I love your poem and find is so uplifting – a sense of relief as your work takes flight! Oh, your words are all too familiar…This stanza particularly rings true for me:

    ‘I let you out
    For a short visit here and there,
    Undoing your jacket of dust
    With a flutter, and a frown on my part.’

    I’m so glad that you found inspiration through Teagan’s post and I will pop over there. Over the Easter, free from stress and ‘musts’, I finally realised what I need to work on my ms…it’s going to be a lot of work and I’m gearing myself up…but I feel sure it is a story that needs to be told and that it is good. Thank you for sharing your inspiring poem – inspiring and given me a boost!😀❤️

    Liked by 2 people

    Reply
    1. Christy B Post author

      I think we both are prepping for a tough writing road ahead, Annika, but I like that we’re both enthusiastic about it and looking at the positive! Thanks for the amazing comment here ❤ Hugs for Friday 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      Reply
  17. Marje @ Kyrosmagica

    Great poem Christy. Know all about manuscripts collecting dust – have a fair few of my own, some uncompleted. Perhaps 2017 will be my year for the writing butterfly within me to set free my work! No wonder I call it The Curse Of Time it’s taking me forever to finish!

    Like

    Reply
  18. Dewin Nefol

    Hey Chrissie,

    One small stride across the divide to be at the side of CB in BC brought us onto the meandering path disappearing away into the sunny glade of your header photograph, where we stayed, lingered, lazed and gazed our eyes upon your page and enjoyed a poetry of novel words. Yet before our reading had begun we had already fallen into the spell of prismatic shades and vibrant bubbles buoyant and bursting and basking athwart a backdrop illumed by the light of infinity. We are left breathless pondering wonder, wide-eyed with wonderment, and eager to wander with bubbles.

    We came to thank you for your follow at Gallybloggers, for your support in promoting Dark Raven, and for kindness and consideration of our work. Your appreciation is warmly received, your kindness most welcome and graciously accepted. Thank you.

    The Next Take…took us on a metaphorical flight urged onwards by your inky wing as she unfurled her lettered feathers and carried your exhilarated tome skywards to soar with bubbles. We imagine your heart and soul flutter with her whilst your feet remain earthbound. It is the flight of Psyche and Eros….the eternal love affair gifting us wings of passion and attitudes for want of high altitudes beyond the clouds and dust of old jackets. A wonderful poem about purposefulness, intention and the rewards for continued and sustained hard work and honest endeavour. Thank you, we find it inspiring, and of course wish you well for the inaugural first flight.

    May we also say Chrissie how sincere and generous we find your replies are to everyone commenting here. We suspect you exude the same sense of gentleness and warmth in person as you do in the kindness of your words. It’s a pleasure to befriend you CB in BC. Thank you.

    We wish you a most enjoyable conclusion to your weekend and hope for a prosperous, peaceful and productive week ahead.

    Take care in all ways for always. We look forward to sharing your company at Gallybloggers.

    Namaste 🙂

    DN and Raven’s 12
    ((https://bwbachandtheraven.wordpress.com/ )

    Liked by 1 person

    Reply
      1. Dewin Nefol

        Hey CB,

        Thank you, that is very kind of you to say so: it’s my pleasure to respond to the enjoyment of your poem viscerally. Perhaps Christy you are already long embarked on that introspective journey to flaming ignition and take-off and I am nothing more than a gentle reminder to that fact. You were blessed with a passionate heart and inky wings to fly 🙂

        I hope you’ll enjoy a wonderful week soaring into your future.

        In all ways always, take care CB from BC

        Namaste 🙂

        P.S: My apologies for misspelling your name Christy. It was a slip of the pen 🙂

        Like

        Reply

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s